英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第1篇

这里专指语态、比较级、非谓语形式、冠词用法、可数名词和不可数名词、不定代词单复数以及时态等错误。

1、误：Narrow streets easily cause to happen many traffic accidents.

正：narrow streets easily cause many traffic accidents. (to happen)

误：A great change has been taken place since then.

正：A great change has taken place since then.

误：But it may occur some new problems.

正：But some new problems may occur/arise.

误：Opportunities are only belonged to those who work hard.

正：Opportunities only belong to those who work hard.

【说明】happen，take place，occur，arise等动词和动词词组一般既不能用作被动结构，也不能作为及物动词带宾语的。但学生作文中类似的错误较多：Our country has taken place a great change in many fields.

2、误：The pace of our modern life is getting more faster and faster.

正：The pace of our modern life is getting faster and faster.

误：Electricity is the most important power in our daily life than other kinds of power.

正：Electricity is the most important power in our daily life.

误：Thus our city will be greatly beautiful than it is now.

正：Thus our city will be far more beautiful than it is now.

【说明】这些都是在使用比较形式时出现的错误。尤其是第1例较普遍。如more easier，more stronger等。

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第2篇

写作文首先是从写正确的句子开始。一个句子从语法上讲是指由大写字母开始，由名词，动词或词组构成的一个陈述句，祈使句，惊叹句和疑问句。由句号，疑问号或惊叹号来结束。表示一个意思讲完了，它表示停顿和呼吸。音乐的乐谱讲“乐句，”一个乐句弹奏完了要停顿一下是一样的道理。 要注意的是很多(包括美国)学生在写英语作文的时候，不知道英语的句号要用在引号前面。正确的例句如：She said, “You are a good girl.”这一细节请注意。有的学生写英语作文喜欢用复合句，认为这样不容易出错。其实，很多学生连简单的英语句子都不能保证写对的时候，就写出来些错误的复合句。这就象一个小孩还没有学会走路就开始学跑步，肯定是要跌跤的。我认识一位美国的高中英语教师，美国文学学士Temple Sterling 女士认为将英语作为外语来学习的学生还是先学会使用简单句然后再学习复合句也不迟。

(一)尽量使用基本句型

英语句子结构的特点是：相对于德语，法语，俄语，英语“比较简单，自然，合乎逻辑思维的自然顺序。”(李赋宁《英语学习经验谈》147页)。要写好英语作文首先要掌握基本的英语句型：英语千变万化的句子归根到底都离不开以下这五个基本的句型。(《大学英语》：语法与练习 第一册第1页)通常情况下，一个句子的关键在于动词。有人提出的观点是：动词是一个句子的灵魂。

1. Mary is a (主——动——主补)

2. The flowers are blooming. SV (主——动)

3. I have a pen. SVO(主——动——宾)

4. The mother will buy the girl a bike. SVOi (间接宾语)Od(直接宾语) (主——动——间宾——直宾)

5. The parents consider the child a genius. SVOCo (主——动——宾——宾补)

英语中的系表结构也很常用。如：You look 与happy构成系表结构。

(二)活用英语连词

英语里有些短语就象水泥一样把整个段落的构连架连接起来。如：表示结果：as a result, consequently, therefore, etc. in contrast, however, etc. 递进：furthermore, in addition, etc. 总结：in a word, in brief, in short, etc. 转折：but, in spite of, etc. 原因：because, because of, 让步：though

(三)学会使用平行结构

平行结构相当于汉语里的排比结构，它是英美人喜欢使用的一种语言结构，即将相类似的词或者动词结构放在一起，这样不容易出错，并且排列整齐，营造出一种气势。根据一个美国老师的观点，如果一个中国人向英国或是美国的公司用写英语求职信，会使用平行结构的人将会被优先录用。

平行结构例句1，Mary is a kind, cute, clever, happy girl.

例2，Every morning, after I get up, I get dressed, make bed,brush my teeth, wash my face, have breakfast and go to school.(有下划线部分为平行结构。)

(四)运用语气加强情感

英语里有一些缩写，如I#39;m , he#39;s , she#39;s, I#39;ve, I don#39;t 等等，you#39;re 的读音与your 相同。所有的这些缩写形式都是英语里不正式的用法和语气。在正式语体中，如果给美国总统写信，就不可以用缩写形式，而必须要用 I am, You are, He is 等等。用He is hard-working 比he works hard.语气弱。(be 结构比动词的气弱要弱。)long for语气很强，一般只能在恋人之间使用。如英语一首情歌歌词：I am longing for you.

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词典是学习一门语言的工具，很多学生学英语没有经常查英语词典的习惯，这是不良的学习习惯,应该多多使用词典。有的语言学家认为甚至看一个学生使用什么样的词典就可以判断的的学习水平。我认为首选的应该是经济实惠的英汉双解词典，如：《郎文英汉双解活用词典》(LONGMAN ACTIVE STUDY ENGLISH-CHINESE DICTIONARY)(上海译文出版社，32元)，然后再过度到使用英英词典。当然，查名词通常需要借助汉英词典。在查英语词典的时候我们还应该学习的是词语的搭配。如：because of后只能接名词词组(做宾语)，because后只能接表示原因的从句。学习单词时请记住英语单词的词性。如bribe可以是名词，也可以作为动词来使用。如：The bank teller bribed his banker.(银行出纳员贿赂他的上司) The banker was charged with taking bribes from the bank teller.(银行经理被指控接受出纳员的贿赂)The government fights against the bribery(政府打击行贿受贿)。学习词的时候一般情况下不要孤立地学，否则容易忘记。尽量作到“词不离句，句不离文。”有的学生写作文的时候从英语词典里找到他们需要的词。这并不是明智的学习英语写作的方法。或者根据自己的汉语思维将要表达的意思写出来，写出来的英语往往给人感觉非常蹩脚而不自然。前提是他在写作文以前到没有大量的阅读中去吸取知识的养分，培养语感，就象蜜蜂不采蜜就酿不出蜜的道理一样。

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第4篇

Many people like music. It has many sorts: soft music is graceful, rock music fast, classical music GREat, light music relaxing, and children, music interesting.

You can pick and choose whatever you like. Now popular songs are in fashion. If you like music, you usually like singing, too. I am no exception.

My brother and I like pop songs, and my parents like to listen to soft music. We are a musical family. Do you like music? Is your family full of music, too? Music is really GREat! I like it very much.

This pie chart clearly illustrates the purposes of students’ touring in a certain university. As is reflected by the diagram, 37 percent of college students travel in a bid to appreciating the scenery, next comes the aim of relieving pressure, accounting for 33% percent. By contrast, the percentage of students travelling aiming at others, making friends and cultivating independence account for 15%, 9% and 6% respectively.

Several primary factors could contribute to this phenomenon. In the first place, travel can offer us a wide range of experiences. In travelling, we may join tourists marveling at the incredible power of Niagara Falls, mingle with the happy throngs strolling in the Paris boulevards and experience the bitterness and joy of people on different lands and in different times. In the second place, college students, who have to juggle academic work, romantic relationships and a busy social calendar, are particularly susceptible to pressure. By touring, they can successfully manage and reduce stress.

Taking all these factors into consideration, we may predict that with the quickening pace of campus life and ever-increasing pressure, the number of university students touring will keep growing in the forthcoming decade.

I have many friends, but my best friend is Li Hua, she is a girl, we get to know each other when I am four. Now I am ten years old, Li Hua is also the same age with me, we have been together for seven years. We share happiness and sorrow, I will tell her my secret and she will also tell me her secret. We will be best friends forever.

我有很多朋友，但是我最好的朋友是李华，她是一个女孩，我们认识的时候我只有四岁。现在我已经十岁了，李华也和我一样大，我们在一起已经有7年了。我们分享喜怒和哀乐，我会告诉她我的秘密，她也会告诉我她的秘密。我们永远都是最好的朋友。

One day，my father bought a little cat for me. I was very happy. It has two small ears, two black eyes and quite a lot of brown hair. I like it so much. I often play with it, so it becomes my good friend quickly. It does not eat very much. It likes to come to my room to play with me. When I am not happy, I usually chat with my little cat.

I love my pet, and I know it loves me, too. W e are happy to own each other.

一天，我爸爸给我买了一直小猫。我很开心。它又两只小耳朵，两只黑眼睛和许多棕色的毛。我很喜欢它。我经常和它玩，所以它很快就成为了我的好朋友。它吃得不是很多。它很喜欢到我房间和我玩。当我不开心的时候，我经常和我的小猫咪聊天。

我爱的我宠物，我知道它也很爱我。我们很高兴拥有彼此。

There are five people in my family. They’re my mother, my father, my wife, my daughter and me.

My father and my mother are farmers. They’re sixties. They’re very kind. My wife is an editor. She is nice and tall. She works hard. She's very strict with my daughter. I have a beautiful daughter. She is twelve. She's very cute. I like playing with her. She is a student. She is good at Chinese. She wants to be a Chinese teacher when she grows up. I’m a worker. Every day I go to work on foot. It’s good for my health. I love my job.

I feel very happy. I love my family.

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第5篇

在使用代词it，he，this，that，which，one等时，前文中应出现明确的先行词。

如：Since we cannot know what particular bit of knowledge a child will need in the future，it is senseless to force him to learn it.，这句话中，him和it这两个代词都有明确的先行词，分别是a child和knowledge，因此句子的含义非常清楚。

可是，不少学生在使用这些代词时，虽然自己很清楚它们指代的是什么，但在作文中却没有交代清楚，结果这些代词非但没有使行文简洁，反而造成了意思上的模糊，让阅卷老师不知所云。

误：Sometimes teachers will inform students of the heavy burden they have to bear.

正：Sometimes the teacher will inform students of the heavy burden he has to bear.

【说明】句1中的they既可指教师，也可指学生，属指代不清的。可以把它们中的任意一个改成单数名词。因为单数名词也可以泛指一类。

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一个典型的英语段落往往先点明主题思想，即(topic sentence)，然后再对该主题加以分析，论证，即(support)，最后是一个总结性的句子，即(conclusion)。(姚君伟《跨文化语境下的外语教学》188页)

例：(主题句：)Competition is common in every field of life.(展开部分：)(1：) For example, the Olympic Games is the most famous competition in the world. (2：)In the four hundred meter swimming race, the swimmers plunge into the water at the signal.( 3：)Each swings his or her arms and legs and tries his or her best to be the first. (4：)Also there is the competition for jobs, for promotion, for customers, and so on. (总结：)We can say ,in a certain sense, competition stimulating people#39;s interest in work helps society to go forward.

如果 将段落的结构再扩展，就成为一篇文章的结构。美式写作结构的特点是：段落层次分明，观点阐述平行推进，直线思维，逻辑性强，行文如流水，简洁明了。(崔晓霞《大学英语作文应试章法》第7页)

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句子是由词组合而成的。有的学生在写英语作文的时候，喜欢用生僻的词，认为这样可以得到高分。我觉得这似乎有些“为赋新诗强说愁”的味道。如I deem(我想)，而不用I think.一位美国的心理学博士Lois Gail认为：deem通常不可以取代 think. 因为 deem 是英语中非常正式的说法，包含了判断和权威。她用英语讲解：In current English, “deem” is very formal and almost connotes judgment and is not commonly used as a substitute for “think.” 用什么样的词要分场合。如果是一个非常庄严肃穆的场合，可以用deem, 但如果表达个人对某一问题的看法，还是要用think合情理些。

有的学生写作文的时候反复用一个词组，会给人枯燥的感觉。如：Every morning, I get up early, then go to do some sports. Doing sports makes me healthy and smart.作文中的用法都是正确的，但更好的则是：Every morning, I get up early to play basketball or go some jogging, which makes me healthy and energetic. 中国学生在英语作文中喜欢用的一个英语表达法do some sports(从事体育运动)，是从中学英语课本学来的。可是在现代英语里，这个表达法几乎没有人使用了。如果从事体育运动，就具体表达成：play basketball, play football.等等。

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在一个句子内部或紧邻的两三个句子之间，要保持时态、人称、数等的一致。

误：Whether one enjoys or resents advertisements, we are actually bombarded with it every hour of the day.

正：Whether we enjoy or resent advertisements, we are actually bombarded with them every hour of the day.

【说明】代词应与所指代的先行词保持人称和数上的一致。句1也可改成Whether one enjoys or resents the advertisement, he is actually bombarded with it every hour of the day.

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第9篇

Shanghai, China's largest modern city, is situated in the middle of China's east coastal line. Shanghai covers an area of over 6,340 squarekilos and has a population of over 15 million.

It is the largest economic and trade centre in the country and acomprehensive industrial base.

It is an open city along the coast, as well as a famoushistorical and cultural city. Shanghai's history of revolution andculture attract tourists home and abroad. Being regarded as xxxParis of Chinaxxx and as the paradise for shopping, Shanghai has become an idealcity for tourism.

The Pudong Development Area in Shanghai is an important specialeconomic zone in China. Efforts are being made to develop Shanghai into a modern international economic, financial and trade centre.

Welcome to visit Shanghai!

Skiing,or traveling over snow on skis,has a history of almost five modern skiing has evolved from beginnings in Scandinavia,it may have been practised as early as 600 BC in Daxing'anling,in what is now China.

Originally purely utilitarian,starting in the mid-1800s skiing became a popular recreational activity and sport,being practised around the world,and providing crucial economic support to purpose-built ski resorts and munities

The oldest and most accurately documented evidence of skiing origins is found in modern day Norway and earliest primitive carvings circa 5000 a skier with one pole,located in Rdy in the Nordland region of first primitive ski was found in a peat bog in Hoting,Sweden which dates back to 4500 or 2500 .

Skiing is a recreational activity and petitive sport in which the participant attaches long runners or skis to boots or shoes on the feet and uses them to travel on top of from recreation and petition,skiing has been used for military purposes and even travelling in areas that experience heavy types of petitive skiing events are recognized by the International Olympic Committee,and the International Ski Federation.

I am a happy girl, because I don’t have much things to chase, I will be satisfied very easily. When I go to school and play with my friends, I will be very happy. When I go home after school, my mother cook the delicious food, I will be very satisfied to eat. When the weekend comes, I like to go out with my father. This is my world, so simple and so happy.

我是一个快乐的女孩，因为我没有太多的东西去追求，我会很容易就满足。当我上学，和朋友们玩在一起，我会很高兴。当我放学回家，我的妈妈为我煮了美味的食物，我会心满意足地吃起来。当周末来临，我喜欢我爸爸一起出去。这就是我的世界，简单又快乐。

In my house, I have my room, my room is my private place, I don’t have to listen to my parents’ babbling. I like to stay at my room when I finish my dinner, I will stay silent and think about the question without other people’s interfere. My room can keep me safe and leave me the space to think. I love my room, I want to decorate it someday, making it more comfortable.

在我家，我有自己的房间，我的房间是我私人的`地方，我不用去听父母的唠叨。我喜欢在饭后呆在房间里，我会保持安静，在没有收到别人干扰的情况下去思考问题。我的房间可以让我感到安全，给予我空间去思考。我喜欢我的房间，我想要有一天去装饰下，让它看起来更加的舒适。

This year I have a happy spring featival with my family.

On New Year's Eve,all the family people get together to have a big dinner in the the dinner we have a small talk and play some games.

Thanks to this spring festival,it make our family people get enjoy ourselves and in the new year we all fighting.

今年我有一个与我的家人快乐的春节.

在除夕夜,全家人聚在一起吃顿大餐.吃饭的时候,我们有一个聊天和玩游戏.

感谢这个春节,它使我们的家庭团聚.我们享受自己在新的一年里我们的战斗.

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1、Tenyearslater,I,',Ihaveahouse,carand,ofcourse,!

Tenyearslater,maybeI',becauseI,I,.

Tenyearslater,IthoughtthatIwillbecomeadoctor,,IwanttogotoParistolive,,IwilllivewithI,atthattime,,,,,I,,IgoodanticipatedthatIthefuturelife,I!

十年后，我已经大学毕业了，也许有了个很好的工作。运气好的话，老板的女儿会看上我的，我有房子，有车，当然还有美女陪。我会赚很多钱给我的父母买好多好多他们喜欢的。我会活得很幸福!

译文：10年后，也许我会成为一个职业篮球运动员，因为我非常喜欢打篮球，我还会养许多动物，让一些繁重的事给机器人做。十年后，也许我也会成为一名警察，帮助人们抓坏蛋，打击犯罪，成为人们心中的英雄。

十年后，我认为我将成为一个医生，因为可以帮助到很多的人，我想去巴黎居住，听说那很美，我将和我最好的朋友住在公寓里，那时候，小孩不用上学了，他们在家里通过电脑学习，我的家里也有了机器人，可以帮我们干很多家务，我未来的生活中不需要钱了，因为东西都会是免费了，我好期待我未来的生活，我等不急了!

My school life is a lot of fun. I like studying in the classroom with my lovely classmates. We get on well with each other. We play sports and sing together. I often miss my classmates and teachers if I don’t see them for a long time. But sometimes our teachers give us too much homework. Parents and teachers often put great pressure on us.

I wish a happy life in a big city in the future. I will live in a big house with a garden, and drive to work. I will travel a lot in my spare time.

I’ll work hard so that I can go to a good university. Then I can get a good job in the future and my dream will come true.

The general age of college students are between 18 to 25 year. From the psychological point of view, it’s in the medium of youth. Some people say that the college students are adults that they handle well with psychological problems. However, the rest argue that college students are not so mature when faced with psychological problems. I agree to the latter and i think it’s necessary to open a psychological lesson to the college students because of the following reasons.

大学生的一般年龄是在18到25之间。从心理的角度来讲，这是青年中期。有的人说大学生是成年人了，能够很好地处理心理问题。然而，剩下的人认为大学生面对心理问题的时候没有那么成熟。我同意后者的观点，我认为向大学生开设心理课是必要的。原因如下。

Firstly, in recent years, there are more and more college students drop out from school due to psychological problems. Growing , homicides and other unusual serious incidents are reported from time to time. Now, the social attention to college students’ mental health has reached to climax. Secondly, college students are in a perplexed and contradictory age. On the one hand, they have to study in school to enrich themselves and to get a diploma. On the other hand, they think they are mature to live an independent life, but most of them still depend on their parents. In addition, study challenge, employment pressure and life stress could produce psychological problems.

首先，近几年，越来越多的大学生由于心理问题而辍学。越多自杀，谋杀以及其他不正常的严重事故时不时有报道。如今，对大学生心理健康的关注已经达到了高潮。其次，大学生处于一个困惑和矛盾的年龄。一方面，他们认为自己已经成熟了，能够独立生活，但是大部分仍然依靠父母。而且，学习压力，就业压力和生活压力也会产生心理问题。

To sum up, college students are adults but they are still faced with many pressures causing psychological problems that they can not deal with. Therefore, it’s very necessary to open a psychological lesson to college students, helping them get through this period smoothly.

总之，大学生是成年人，但是他们仍然面临很多他们不能解决的引起心理问题的压力。因此，向大学生开设心理课程是有必要的，能够帮助他们顺利度过这一时期。

My name is Wu jiawei. My English name is Jerry. I like fruits very much, but I don’t like eating I like riding a bike and doing some exercises on the playground. I don’t like reading some books, but I like drawing pictures. I like many animals, and I like English so much. My mum is young, she is always very tired because she is very busy. Everyday she gets up early in the morning and cooks breakfast for us. In the evening, she often reads some newspaper before she goes to bed. I love my mum, and she loves me too!

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作文中缺少必要的连词，或错用连词的现象也比较普遍。

误：One should improve his English，one should overcome difficulties in studies.

正：If one wants to improve his English，he should overcome difficulties in studies.

【说明】学生在写作中往往意识不到连词的重要，不善于使用连词和连接副词来明确标示出因果关系、转折关系、递进关系等。

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第12篇

一句句子没有结束，又开始新的一句，结果造成句子结构不全，这就成为断句。

误：TV becomes an important part in our daily life. Because we cannot live without it.

正：TV becomes an important part in our daily life，because we cannot live without it.

【说明】以because，since，if等引导的从句是不能独立成句的，只能依属于主句，所以不能写成另一句。

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第13篇

H,.

AsfarasI’mconcerned,.

Asforme,inordertokeepfit,I“junkfood”.

Allinall,.

健康是我们最重要的财富，因此我们应该尽力保持。正如我们所知，好的身体是获得快乐和成功的必要条件。正相反，身体不健康的人多悲观或者抑郁。人们也常认为不健康意味着苦难和失败。

就我看来，我们应当听从三个重要的建议。首先，我们应采取科学的饮食，它能提供身体所需;第二条建议就是要坚持锻炼，特别是那些不愿出门的人;最后，我们应该保持愉悦的心情。

至于我，为了保持健康，我强迫自己远离“垃圾食品”，尽管它们往往很美味可口。另外，我甚至还养成了早锻炼，听美妙的音乐和阅读好书籍的好习惯，它们总能让我精神。

英语作文高分范文赏析初一 第14篇

提高英语的作文可以从训练英语口语开始，口语是文字的先锋。“口头语言早在人类社会形成之初就已出现，至尽已经存在了几百万年，而书面文字的历史只有短短几千年。”(胡壮麟《语言学简明教程》133页)英国著名的英语教学专家格兰特在20xx年3月20日的英语《二十一世纪报》增刊上谈到口语的提高可以促进英语作文水平。他在文中指出：“Oral skills are important both in themselves, and also because they help one to prepare for writing. The best oral activities often lead to written activities that benefit from them.” 还应该多与英美人交流，在实际的生活中了解他们的语言习惯与思维习惯，还可以学到书本上学不到的知识。

思维是写作的前提条件。著名语言学家王力先生曾说“中国的语言是人制的，西洋的语言是法制的。”所以他们的语言逻辑性强，人情味淡;我们的语言逻辑性差，人情味强。如：1)我的祖母还健在。英语：My grandma is still alive(我的祖母还活着).我想只有通过大量的阅读才能培养良好的英语的思维和语感，克服来自母语的干扰。话题又回到阅读上来，读多了就自然培养英语思维，就可以不再受母语思维的干扰。“英语思维在写作中的好处是可以用英美人习惯的言语来表达思想。”

Christmas is a holiday, we are very happy because it was fun.

Yesterday, the school organized the English carnival activities, because Christmas day is on Sunday, so they celebrated in advance. At noon, I took part in the games, the rule is this: a total of 12 projects, each student has twelve squares integral card, after attending a project if the customs clearance, you can make a mark in a grid, set full can change award. I go to the nearest a game, I was still not arrived later, I will. Then I attended many projects, and I finally got the prize.

This is really a happy Christmas!

This term I should study harder. I am good at math, physics and science lessons. My English is not good. I think I should learn from my friend Nari. His English is good. Perhaps he would like to help me. Teacher said, my compo-sitions were not good. So I should read more useful books after class. I believe I will do well in English. On the other way, I should do more exercise, this will make me strong. I like playing ball games. After class I should make more friends, because the more we are together, the happier we are.